Thanks for the comments, guatemala fanfic, they were very helpful. When it comes to some of the characters, some of them you mentioned will definitely pick up a little bit in the next two episodes, particularly Rosie, Rachel, and Sherry. (I've already written about half of Episode 6 and I have a good idea of what happens in Episode 7) I actually had the same worry about Leon and John when I started writing the fanfic, and I definitely see what you're saying about them being too similar, so I will definitely try to write in their differences in the coming episodes, and I will also work on cutting up the paragraphs as you mentioned. Thanks again!

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